On this page, you’ll find a few examples of writing and proofreading work I’ve done. In most cases, once a piece reaches the proofreading stage, all major edits have been completed. Proofreading is the final step before publishing!
*The corrections are marked in red
Before
The Three Bears
A long time ago in a cottage on the edge of a great forest there dwelt a little girl by the name of Golden hair; she was an orphan and lived with her grandmother who loved her dearly. The grandmother was very old, and so most of the house work was done by Golden Hair; but she was so young and strong she did not mind that a bit, for she had plenty of time to play and was merry the whole day long.
Although little Golden Hair lived far from other children, she was never lonesome, for she had many friends and playmates in the wild creatures of the the wood. The gentle, soft eyed deer would feed from her hand, and the wild birds would come at her musical call, for she knew their language and loved them well.
Golden Hair had never wandered far into the forest. But one day in the early autumn time, as she was gathering bright leaves and golden rod, she strayed farther than she knew and came upon a lonely grey cabin under the mighty trees. A slab of wood beside the half open door told who lived within. It read:
“Papa Bear, Mamma Bear, and Tiny Bear.”
“So this is where the jolly bears live!” said Golden Hair, as she knocked upon the door. “I want to meet them.”
No answer came to her knocking, so she pushed the door wide open and walked in.
It was a most disorderly house, but a bright fire burned on the hearth, over which hung a big black kettle of bubbling soup, while on the table near by were three yellow bowls of different sizes.
“A bug bowl for papa Bear, a medium sized bowl for Mamma Bear, and a little bowl for Tiny Bear,” said Golden Hair.
“That soup smells good,” she went on to say, “but my! What an untidy house! I’ll put the place to rights while I am waiting for the bears to come home.”
So she went to work to sweep and dust and soon had the room in order. Then she went into the bed room and made up the three beds: the big one for Papa Bear, the medium-sized one for Mamma Bear, and the little one for Tiny Bear. She bustled and had everything as neat as a pin when in bounced the three jolly bears. For a moment the bears stood speechless, with wide-open eyes, starting at Golden Hair, who stood like a ray of sunshine in the dusky room; then they burst into loud laughter and made her welcome to their home. When they saw how nice and clean it was they thanked her heartily and invited her to share their dinner, for the soup was now ready and they were all hungry. Golden Hair spent the rest of the day with the three jolly bears playing “hi spy” and many new games which the bears taught her.
After
The Three Bears
A long time ago, in a cottage on the edge of a great forest, there dwelt a little girl by the name of Golden Hhair; she was an orphan and lived with her grandmother, who loved her dearly. The grandmother was very old, and so most of the house work was done by Golden Hair; but she was so young and strong she did not mind that a bit, for she had plenty of time to play and was merry the whole day long.
Although little Golden Hair lived far from other children, she was never lonesome, for she had many friends and playmates in the wild creatures of the the wood. The gentle, soft-eyed deer would feed from her hand, and the wild birds would come at her musical call, for she knew their language and loved them well.
Golden Hair had never wandered far into the forest. But one day in the early autumn time, as she was gathering bright leaves and golden rod, she strayed farther than she knew and came upon a lonely graey cabin under the mighty trees. A slab of wood beside the half- open door told who lived within. It read:
“Papa Bear, Mamma Bear, and Tiny Bear.”
“So this is where the jolly bears live!” said Golden Hair, as she knocked upon the door. “I want to meet them.”
No answer came to her knocking, so she pushed the door wide open and walked in.
It was a most disorderly house, but a bright fire burned on the hearth, over which hung a big black kettle of bubbling soup, while on the table near by were three yellow bowls of different sizes.
“A biug bowl for Ppapa Bear, a medium-sized bowl for Mamma Bear, and a little bowl for Tiny Bear,” said Golden Hair.
“That soup smells good,” she went on to say., “Bbut my! What an untidy house! I’ll put the place to rights while I am waiting for the bears to come home.”
So she went to work to sweep and dust and soon had the room in order. Then she went into the bed room and made up the three beds: the big one for Papa Bear, the medium-sized one for Mamma Bear, and the little one for Tiny Bear. She bustled and had everything as neat as a pin when in bounced the three jolly bears. For a moment the bears stood speechless, with wide-open eyes, starting at Golden Hair, who stood like a ray of sunshine in the dusky room; then they burst into loud laughter and made her welcome to their home. When they saw how nice and clean it was, they thanked her heartily and invited her to share their dinner, for the soup was now ready and they were all hungry. Golden Hair spent the rest of the day with the three jolly bears playing “hi I spy” and many new games which the bears taught her.
Notice how there’s not a lot of corrections to be made. Many are just simple mistakes that can be easily fixed. The story is still comprehensible, but it just looks sloppy if left alone. Don’t feel discouraged, these errors are made by even the most highly-skilled writers.
Before
Facebook for Business
Facebook began in 2004 to help college students stay in contact with each other. In fact, you were required to have a legitimate college email address to even sign up. Now facebook has approximately 8,330,420 US English-speaking users in the United States, Canada, and Australia alone. You can set up pages for anything from your pet rabbit to your multi-billion dollar business.
Hosting a business page on Facebook is a great to market a business. With the click of a mouse, a business can get in front of countless numbers of eyes. Hundreds of millions of people across the world have a Facebook account and spend a significant number of hours every month (even every day)! on Facebook. Even though Facebook started out as a social network for college students, now the biggest group of users is thirty-five years and older.
Marketing on Facebook is consequently a simple way to get a business known. It is also a good way to popularize that business with potential customers. It is easy to flip through the TV channels or throw away your junk mail. But an advertisement is harder to avoid when it is attached to the sides of Facebook profiles that people access every day.
Facebook and advertising helps a business become noticed by individuals who are looking for the products or services that business offers. It also allows a business to easily communicate with potential customers or current clients to keep them updated on any specials or deals that business are running, as well as to keep them reminded of and intunewith that business. Facebook and businesses also work together to help business managers understand what possible clients are looking for, as well as to better associate with customers they are now serving or have served in the past.
Small businesses are especially reliant on Facebook advertising to get their names out to their communities. Statues updates, newsfeeds, frequently refreshed content, and appropriate adds all work together with Facebook advertising to create strong business ties. Many businesses use Facebook as their only web base, rather than having to host their own website. Or their Facebook page can easily link to their main business website or visa versa.
Especially in today’s struggling economy, Facebook advertising has provided businesses with a cheap yet extremely efficient way to advertise. Often advertising on Facebook nets more results then many other forms of marketing.
Now that Facebook is easily viewable on cell phones, Facebook advertising is even more notable. Facebook mobile users generate twice as much activity on their accounts, and about 200 million users use Facebook on their phones every day. Consequently, it is extremely easy to get businesses noticed by hundreds of thousands of people each hour.
Through analyzing this vast number of individuals how make up Facebook and how they respond to advertising on Facebook, it is possible to ascertain the dynamics of social networking. We can then apply this to global marketing. By understanding how people process information, it is possible to greatly improve business and learning.
After
Facebook for Business
Facebook began in 2004 to help college students stay in contact with each other. In fact, you were required to have a legitimate college email address to even sign up. Now facebook Facebook has approximately 8,330,420 US English-speaking users in the United States, Canada, and Australia alone. You can set up pages for anything from your pet rabbit to your multi-billion- dollar business.
Hosting a business page on Facebook is a great way to market a business. With the click of a mouse, a business can get in front of countless numbers of eyes. Hundreds of millions of people across the world have a Facebook account and spend a significant number of hours every month (even every day!)! on Facebook. Even though Facebook started out as a social network for college students, now the biggest group of users is thirty-five years and older.
Marketing on Facebook is consequently a simple way to get a business known. It is also a good way to popularize that business with potential customers. It is easy to flip through the TV channels or throw away your junk mail. But an advertisement is harder to avoid when it is attached to the sides of Facebook profiles that people access every day.
Facebook and advertising helps a business become noticed by individuals who are looking for the products or services that business offers. It also allows a business to easily communicate with potential customers or current clients to keep them updated on any specials or deals that business are is running, as well as to keep them reminded of and intune with that business. Facebook and businesses also work together to help business managers understand what possible clients are looking for, as well as to better associate with customers they are now serving or have served in the past.
Small businesses are especially reliant on Facebook advertising to get their names out to their communities. Statues updates, newsfeeds, frequently refreshed content, and appropriate adds all work together with Facebook advertising to create strong business ties. Many businesses use Facebook as their only web base, rather than having to host their own website. Or their Facebook page can easily link to their main business website or visa vice versa.
Especially in today’s struggling economy, Facebook advertising has provided businesses with a cheap yet extremely efficient way to advertise. Often advertising on Facebook nets more results then than many other forms of marketing.
Now that Facebook is easily viewable on cell phones, Facebook advertising is even more notable. Facebook mobile users generate twice as much activity on their accounts, and about 200 two hundred million users use Facebook on their phones every day. Consequently, it is extremely easy to get businesses noticed by hundreds of thousands of people each hour.
Through analyzing this vast number of individuals how who make up Facebook and how they respond to advertising on Facebook, it is possible to ascertain the dynamics of social networking. We can then apply this to global marketing. By understanding how people process information, it is possible to greatly improve business and learning.
Before
Three Foods to Stop Eating
Considering the wide variety of foods Americans has access to, it may be surprising to step back and take a look at the average American’s diet. You’ll find out that over half of their daily intake is made up of just three different foods. These are corn, soy, and wheat derivatives. Consuming these three food types will lead to weight gain and difficulty obtaining six-pack abs. If you want six-pack abs, than these three food types must be largely eliminated from your diet.
Where can these foods sources be found? Corn is one of the most extensively processed foods, especially considering high-fructose corn syrup is made from it. High-fructose corn syrup is found in just about every processed food and in many drinks. Pick up a packaged food item in the grocery store and read the ingredients, high-fructose corn syrup will likely be listed. High-fructose corn syrup is a corn syrup that has had some of its glucose turned into fructose. Fructose has been directly linked to weight gain.
Soybean oil, along with corn oil, are added to hundreds of foods in order to preserve them longer on the shelf and make the food taste better. About 1/2 of the world’s oil used for eating is soybean oil. Along with acting as food additives, soybeans and corn are ground up and used as feed for cattle and chickens. Giants in the food industry have found it politically and financially beneficial to substitute natural food for cattle and chickens with soy and corn-based products, resulting in unhealthy animals. This ultimately leads to polluted meat, which then makes it’s way to the consumer.
Refined wheat flour is another food source Americans consume an inordinate amount of. This can be found in muffins, breads, pastries, cakes, hamburger buns, chips—the list is almost endless. While refined wheat flour started as wheat, a healthy natural ingredient, the refining process takes away all the nutrients found in wheat and quickly turns it into sugar.
Eating excessive amounts of corn, soy, and wheat leads to weight gain, diabetes, and heart problems, just to mention a few. Furthermore, soy and corn are sprayed with herbicides which contain xenoestrogens, a fake estrogen that is specifically notorious for building up belly fat.
With these three food types so common in every day menus, it can seem almost overwhelming to combat this and get a chiseled six-pack. It will take discipline and commitment, but if six-pack abs are your aim, then you will need to adjust your mindset to overcome any obstacles.
One of the best ways to avoid corn, soy, and wheat is to avoid processed foods and nonorganic meats, considering these contain the highest amounts of corn, soy, and wheat. Cut out salad dressings and salads. Reevaluate snack food choices and focus on organic, natural foods instead. If removing wheat from your diet means cutting out a large amount ofcarbohydrates, add fruits high in carbs to your diet.
It will be challenging to eliminate what makes up over fifty percent of the average food intake. However, there are tasty and healthy alternatives. For instance, vegetables slices dipped in homemade guacamole, fruit with organic peanut butter, blueberries, almonds, and cottage cheese are all healthy snack choices.
Eliminating these three foods from your diet will not only bring numerous health benefits, but it will also result in six pack abs when combined with exercise. Say goodbye to corn, soy, and wheat and hello to an awesome six-pack.
After
Three Foods to Stop Eating
Considering the wide variety of foods Americans has have access to, it may be surprising to step back and take a look at the average American’s diet. You’ll find out that over half of their daily intake is made up of just three different foods. These are corn, soy, and wheat derivatives. Consuming these three food types will lead to weight gain and difficulty obtaining six-pack abs. If you want six-pack abs, thean these three food types must be largely eliminated from your diet.
Where can these foods sources be found? Corn is one of the most extensively processed foods, especially considering high-fructose corn syrup is made from it. High-fructose corn syrup is found in just about every processed food and in many drinks. Pick up a packaged food item in the grocery store and read the ingredients;, high-fructose corn syrup will likely be listed. High-fructose corn syrup is a corn syrup that has had some of its glucose turned into fructose. Fructose has been directly linked to weight gain.
Soybean oil, along with corn oil, are is added to hundreds of foods in order to preserve them longer on the shelf and make the food taste better. About 1/2half of the world’s oil used for eating is soybean oil. Along with acting as food additives, soybeans and corn are ground up and used as feed for cattle and chickens. Giants in the food industry have found it politically and financially beneficial to substitute natural food for cattle and chickens with soy- and corn-based products, resulting in unhealthy animals. This ultimately leads to polluted meat, which then makes it’s way to the consumer.
Refined wheat flour is another food source Americans consume an inordinate amount of. This can be found in muffins, breads, pastries, cakes, hamburger buns, chips—the list is almost endless. While refined wheat flour started as wheat, a healthy natural ingredient, the refining process takes away all the nutrients found in wheat and quickly turns it into sugar.
Eating excessive amounts of corn, soy, and wheat leads to weight gain, diabetes, and heart problems, just to mention a few. Furthermore, soy and corn are sprayed with herbicides which that contain xenoestrogens, a fake estrogen that is specifically notorious for building up belly fat.
With these three food types so common in every day menus, it can seem almost overwhelming to combat this and get a chiseled six-pack. It will take discipline and commitment, but if six-pack abs are your aim, then you will need to adjust your mindset to overcome any obstacles.
One of the best ways to avoid corn, soy, and wheat is to avoid processed foods and nonorganic meats, considering these contain the highest amounts of corn, soy, and wheat. Cut out salad dressings and on salads. Reevaluate snack food choices and focus on organic, natural foods instead. If removing wheat from your diet means cutting out a large amount of carbohydrates, add fruits high in carbs to your diet.
It will be challenging to eliminate what makes up over fifty 50 percent of the average food intake. However, there are tasty and healthy alternatives. For instance, vegetables slices dipped in homemade guacamole, fruit with organic peanut butter, blueberries, almonds, and cottage cheese are all healthy snack choices.
Eliminating these three foods from your diet will not only bring numerous health benefits, but it will also result in six- pack abs when combined with exercise. Say goodbye to corn, soy, and wheat and hello to an awesome six-pack.
Before
Fred and Kate
Fred and Kate were man and wife. They had not long been married.
One day Fred said, ‘I am going into the fields, Kate; I shall be hungry when I come in, so have something good ready for dinner, and a cool draught to quench my thirst.”
“All right, Fred, I will have it ready for you when you come back.”
When dinner-time approached, she took down a sausage from the chimney, put it into a frying pan with some butter, and placed it on the fire. The sausage began to frizzle and splutter; and Kate stood holding the pan, lost in her thoughts.
Suddenly she said: “While the sausage is cooking, I might go down to the cellar to draw the beer.” So she put the pan firmly on the fire and took a jug down to the cellar to draw the beer.
Kate watched the beer running in to the jug, and suddenly she said, “I don’t believe the dog is tied up; he might get the sausage out of the frying pan and run off with it.”
She was up the cellar stairs in a twinkling, but the dog had already got the sausage in his jaws and was just making off with it. Kate, who was very agile, ran after him, and chased him a good away over the fields. The dog, however, was quicker than she, and without letting go the sausage, he got right away.
“What is gone, is gone!” she said, and being tired out, she turned back and walked slowly home to cool herself.
In the meantime, the beer had been running out of the cask because Kate had forgotten to turn the tap. As soon as the jug was full, the rest ran all over the cellar floor, till the cask was quiet empty.
Kate saw what had happened as soon as she got to the top of the cellar stairs. “Humph!” she cried, “what am I to do now so that Fred shan’t discover it?”
She thought for a while, and at last she remembered a sack of fine meal they had left over from the last fair. She would fetch it down and strew it over the beer. “To be sure,” she said, “those who save at the right time have something when they need it.”
So she went up to the loft and brought the sack down, but, unfortunately, sh threw it right on to the jug full of beer. It was overturned, and away went Fred’s drink, flooding the cellar with the rest.
“Oh, that won’t matter!” said Kate. “When part is gone, the rest may as well follow.” Then she strewed the meal all over the cellar. She was delighted with her handiwork when it was finished and said, “How clean and fresh it looks.”
At dinnertime Fred came home. “Well, wife, what have you got for dinner?” he said.
After
Fred and Kate
Fred and Kate were man and wife. They had not long been married.
One day Fred said, “‘I am going into the fields, Kate; I shall be hungry when I come in, so have something good ready for dinner, and a cool draught[SC1] draft to quench my thirst.”
“All right, Fred, I will have it ready for you when you come back.”
When dinner-time approached, she took down a sausage from the chimney, put it into a frying pan with some butter, and placed it on the fire. The sausage began to frizzle and splutter; and Kate stood holding the pan, lost in her thoughts.
Suddenly she said: “While the sausage is cooking, I might go down to the cellar to draw the beer.” So she put the pan firmly on the fire and took a jug down to the cellar to draw the beer.
Kate watched the beer running in to the jug, and suddenly she said, “I don’t believe the dog is tied up; he might get the sausage out of the frying pan and run off with it.”
She was up the cellar stairs in a twinkling, but the dog had already got the sausage in his jaws and was just making off with it. Kate, who was very agile, ran after him, and chased him a good away over the fields. The dog, however, was quicker than she, and without letting go of the sausage, he got right away.
“What is gone, is gone!” she said, and being tired out, she turned back and walked slowly home to cool herself.
In the meantime, the beer had been running out of the cask because Kate had forgotten to turn the tap. As soon as the jug was full, the rest ran all over the cellar floor, till the cask was quietquite empty.
Kate saw what had happened as soon as she got to the top of the cellar stairs. “Humph!” she cried., “Wwhat am I to do now so that Fred shan’t discover it?”
She thought for a while, and at last she remembered a sack of fine meal they had left over from the last fair. She would fetch it down and strew it over the beer. “To be sure,” she said, “those who save at the right time have something when they need it.”
So she went up to the loft and brought the sack down, but, unfortunately, she threw it right on to the jug full of beer. It was overturned, and away went Fred’s drink, flooding the cellar with the rest.
“Oh, that won’t matter!” said Kate. “When part is gone, the rest may as well follow.” Then she strewed the meal all over the cellar. She was delighted with her handiwork when it was finished and said, “How clean and fresh it looks.”
At dinnertime Fred came home. “Well, Wwife, what have you got for dinner?” he saidasked.
[SC1]Draught in British English refers to a beer on tap. Draft would be the American English term.